I've written several h/p papers in the past. but each time, I get different and conflicting comments about my writing. I mean, an HPI is how the patient tells his story. How does an instructor tell me the hpi isn't good enough if that's how the patient told the story? Could someone comment on this hpi? The instructor said that when you have a 1 paragraph HPI like the one below, you know you've farked up. How can I improve this hpi? About 3 years ago, DA walked down a hallway to visit her cousin, who was her neighbor at her former residence nearby, after doing her laundry. Before she got to her cousins door, she tripped on what she assumed was a rock, and fell forward onto the ground, breaking her fall with her left knee and left wrist. Her bones broke in these 2 areas. This was the first time she had broken her bones. She was treated at Mt. Sinai for 2 weeks following the incident. Her wrist and knee were bound up in a cast, and subsequently, she was given physical therapy to improve mobility of her wrist and knee. Last May, after her former residence was demolished, her family brought her to -omitted- Home for care. She has been asthmatic since she was in her 60s and had taken cortisone inhalers for many years for treatment of asthma. She currently uses a walker and cane to walk outside her room.