Sounds good to me, just make sure you're spelling is goodly and your  writing f*cking professional, and don't go overboard with humor just  like I did....
I think you should write a paragraph or two on the specifics of the  program before you explain how you fit into it.  Perhaps this is what  you were planning to do, but I am simply emphasizing the point, as some  programs want to be sure that the applicant has done his homework.
p.s. I don't mind reading anybody's SOP if you're looking for a nth  opinion.  Just like many clinical psych students, I have a voyeuristic  fetish for intruding into other people's private lives...which brings me  to my last point: don't disclose personal and private matters, history  of mental illness (except in rare cases), and any info that can make  them question your stability and sanity.