Sounds good to me, just make sure you're spelling is goodly and your writing f*cking professional, and don't go overboard with humor just like I did....
I think you should write a paragraph or two on the specifics of the program before you explain how you fit into it. Perhaps this is what you were planning to do, but I am simply emphasizing the point, as some programs want to be sure that the applicant has done his homework.
p.s. I don't mind reading anybody's SOP if you're looking for a nth opinion. Just like many clinical psych students, I have a voyeuristic fetish for intruding into other people's private lives...which brings me to my last point: don't disclose personal and private matters, history of mental illness (except in rare cases), and any info that can make them question your stability and sanity.