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I was curious if I could get some feedback on some of my generic secondary essay topics. I am just going to provide general structe and see if I can get some feedback on the general themes. Thank you in advance!
Autobiography:
Focus is how my adult life has been structured around being a soldier, a student, and a father
Diversity/What perspectives can I bring:
Focus is how military experience has given me the ability to get a job done, work in a team, and listen/educate my peers
Adversity:
I was a 19-year old Army reservist and landlord with full-time work, a newborn, and full-time school
Societal inequalities of patients I have interacted with:
Focus is on Veteran and military populations I have worked with (and how I have worked with them). The following sentence is a 'fine line to walk' but is it acceptable if I am prepared to answer interview questions?
"I saw how these patient populations often felt left behind by the Veterans Administration health system. I saw how the healthcare teams wanted to do all that they could to help these often-neglected patients. However, the bureaucracy in place is structured in such a way that the healthcare of those who have served is played like a token by policymakers with very little change, to the detriment of the patients."
I would love some feedback on the general ideas within!
PS: If anyone is willing to read any of these essays, that would be fantastic too!
Autobiography:
Focus is how my adult life has been structured around being a soldier, a student, and a father
Diversity/What perspectives can I bring:
Focus is how military experience has given me the ability to get a job done, work in a team, and listen/educate my peers
Adversity:
I was a 19-year old Army reservist and landlord with full-time work, a newborn, and full-time school
Societal inequalities of patients I have interacted with:
Focus is on Veteran and military populations I have worked with (and how I have worked with them). The following sentence is a 'fine line to walk' but is it acceptable if I am prepared to answer interview questions?
"I saw how these patient populations often felt left behind by the Veterans Administration health system. I saw how the healthcare teams wanted to do all that they could to help these often-neglected patients. However, the bureaucracy in place is structured in such a way that the healthcare of those who have served is played like a token by policymakers with very little change, to the detriment of the patients."
I would love some feedback on the general ideas within!
PS: If anyone is willing to read any of these essays, that would be fantastic too!
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