Need help deciding if this is an appropriate topic for UCLA secondary essay.

[pleasehelpme12]

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[Dee2daK]

Disclaimer: Not involved with admissions in any way, nor have I ever been, so take this worth whatever grain of salt you want.

Which aspect of the prompt do you feel as though you are addressing? Placing myself as a reader, I find it difficult to determine. It seems as though in this circumstance, your role is to reinforce the leadership and entrepeneurial efforts of your father. Additionally, I’m sure these letters require careful thought and tact but see little from a creative standpoint. Not to say that this these tasks are worthless - far from it, but I’m just not sure how well it answers the prompt.

I don’t know that the family association hinders, but it won’t particularly help. It could also bring the question of whether you are supporting because of your own internal motivation and interest, or out of some sense of duty/favor for your father.

Like I said, just my $0.02 worth.

 

[pleasehelpme12]

Disclaimer: Not involved with admissions in any way, nor have I ever been, so take this worth whatever grain of salt you want.

Which aspect of the prompt do you feel as though you are addressing? Placing myself as a reader, I find it difficult to determine. It seems as though in this circumstance, your role is to reinforce the leadership and entrepeneurial efforts of your father. Additionally, I’m sure these letters require careful thought and tact but see little from a creative standpoint. Not to say that this these tasks are worthless - far from it, but I’m just not sure how well it answers the prompt.

I don’t know that the family association hinders, but it won’t particularly help. It could also bring the question of whether you are supporting because of your own internal motivation and interest, or out of some sense of duty/favor for your father.

Like I said, just my $0.02 worth.

All good points, thank you

 

[Mr.Smile12]

How would you describe this activity: leadership, entrepreneurial, or creative activity?

 

[pleasehelpme12]

How would you describe this activity: leadership, entrepreneurial, or creative activity?

The angle was entrepreneurial since it involved a lot of work with various investors, but it’s clear I’m not communicating that well. I am opting towards maybe just listing an artistic pursuit instead

 

[Mr.Smile12]

The angle was entrepreneurial since it involved a lot of work with various investors, but it’s clear I’m not communicating that well. I am opting towards maybe just listing an artistic pursuit instead

Yeah, I suggest trying a different topic, especially since you aren't really the entrepreneur and Shark Tank wasn't involved.

 

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You: I helped my entrepreneurial stepdad with some letters.
Adcom: So you yourself weren't entrepreneurial.
You: No, but I did help in securing $150M in funding.
Adcom: So you don't need any financial aid then?
You: [pikachu shock face] Wait, that ain't what I said.

 

[pleasehelpme12]

You: I helped my entrepreneurial stepdad with some letters.
Adcom: So you yourself weren't entrepreneurial.
You: No, but I did help in securing $150M in funding.
Adcom: So you don't need any financial aid then?
You: [pikachu shock face] Wait, that ain't what I said.

Yea, that’s fair