Personal statement reviews/critique

[Stabler22]

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Hey all, I'm polishing my personal statement after several edits. It's still in "draft" mode, as I have changes to make still. I'm about 1000 characters over limit, but I would appreciate any current insight into my statement as of right now. i'm not the best writer, but I'm really working on showing passion and personalism in this essay!