PS and Activities Help?

[DaBiochemist]

Hello, it's my first time posting on SDN. I polished my PS and Activities for grammar/structure, can someone check it for substance; Did I convey a compelling story in my PS or did I "tell" more than "show" ? Did I describe my activities well?

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[LunaOri]

You can send it to me and I will take a look.