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Hi guys. I'd really appreciate some suggestions regarding my personal statement.
My last essay focussed largely on my research work and volunteer experience. One third of my essay was geared towards my family life and how personal experiences have led to my pursuing a career in Medicine. Basically, I've had a number of deaths in my family over the years and I have consequently endeavored to help others. My brother is a med. student in the school I'm applying to, so I'm wondering whether I should talk about my support structure; I didn't do this last time around.
Moreover, I'm wondering whether 3-4 lines from a poem would be a good way to open the essay. I can discuss my familial experiences from there followed by a discussion of my volunteer experience. I could then move onto a discussion about the support structure I have through my brother as well as the doctor I'm working for right now.
By the way, the poetry wouldn't come across as corny, would it?
My last essay focussed largely on my research work and volunteer experience. One third of my essay was geared towards my family life and how personal experiences have led to my pursuing a career in Medicine. Basically, I've had a number of deaths in my family over the years and I have consequently endeavored to help others. My brother is a med. student in the school I'm applying to, so I'm wondering whether I should talk about my support structure; I didn't do this last time around.
Moreover, I'm wondering whether 3-4 lines from a poem would be a good way to open the essay. I can discuss my familial experiences from there followed by a discussion of my volunteer experience. I could then move onto a discussion about the support structure I have through my brother as well as the doctor I'm working for right now.
By the way, the poetry wouldn't come across as corny, would it?