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So how the hell do I add diversity? Well, I'm a white male... nope thats not gonna do it. I did electrical engineering and got a MS in EE and BME. Maybe? I hate these questions. How do you all BS your way through this?
 
i mentioned my graduate degree and upbringing (army brat)

your advanced degree in engineering is unique. you'd just have to tie it to how it would help the med school class.
 
I don't think diversity is necessarily about race. I'm assuming since you have a master's that you're a little bit older. You can talk about that as well. Have you worked? That adds something different than a candidate that went straight through from undergrad.
 
i mentioned my graduate degree and upbringing (army brat)

your advanced degree in engineering is unique. you'd just have to tie it to how it would help the med school class.
I agree...it's all about your background. Was your family poor, did you move around a lot, did you have any unique experiences that your average rural American kid might not have had, etc.? If YOU were the average rural American kid, then you should probably just focus on what sets you apart from other premeds (such as your hobbies, interests, studies, etc. ) I actually find it very surprising how many engineering and computer science students end up as premeds...so that by itself might not be as unique as you might think. Still, you could talk about why you did engineering, what your goals were and how they've changed, etc. If you don't have something amazing that makes you diverse (race, economics, background, etc.) then just try to show them in a very concise way that you are indeed a unique person.

I know sometimes it might feel like you're just another average white guy (majority of med school applicants), but what if you WERE a URM? You couldn't just say "I will add to the diversity of your school because I'm an African-American." That's ridiculous. Even racially diverse people have to answer diversity questions with things from their lives and backgrounds...race plays into this, but by itself will not satisfy the question.
 
I agree...it's all about your background. Was your family poor, did you move around a lot, did you have any unique experiences that your average rural American kid might not have had, etc.? If YOU were the average rural American kid, then you should probably just focus on what sets you apart from other premeds (such as your hobbies, interests, studies, etc. ) I actually find it very surprising how many engineering and computer science students end up as premeds...so that by itself might not be as unique as you might think. Still, you could talk about why you did engineering, what your goals were and how they've changed, etc. If you don't have something amazing that makes you diverse (race, economics, background, etc.) then just try to show them in a very concise way that you are indeed a unique person.

I know sometimes it might feel like you're just another average white guy (majority of med school applicants), but what if you WERE a URM? You couldn't just say "I will add to the diversity of your school because I'm an African-American." That's ridiculous. Even racially diverse people have to answer diversity questions with things from their lives and backgrounds...race plays into this, but by itself will not satisfy the question.

Using race for the diversity essay is shady for me (I'm African American) because honestly, no one wants to be defined that way. Diversity != race for this essay and shouldn't be used by itself.
 
Use anything you feel defines you from other people. For me, I might talk about the fact that I'm the first person in my family to go to college (and one of less than 7 to graduate high school for that matter, but I probably won't mention that). I would talk about my non-medical work experience (yay factories!); often times those are valuable experiences. I would talk about how I did not originally come into college with the mindset of going to medical school and how that changed. Might talk about growing up in a pretty racially diverse area, and how that has helped me develop as a person. There's all kinds of things to talk about.

Don't feel like you have to be extremely unique and new, because it's probably already been done before by someone else anyway. Define yourself and how you're different from everyone else. Anyone can talk about that.
 
Using race for the diversity essay is shady for me (I'm African American) because honestly, no one wants to be defined that way. Diversity != race for this essay and shouldn't be used by itself.

👍
 
You could always make up a new ethnic group to be a part of, like, oh I don't know...you could say you are Urkuzistani.

Failing that, you could stress events in your life you think make you a unique and diverse individual.
 
would it be odd to say that being a resident of the city of the school you are applying to would contribute diversity to your class?

I feel like having a passion for the place that you live and study is really important and something that i could share with my classmates. However, I am afraid that perhaps admissions may think it is a factor that makes me LESS diverse...

any thoughts?
 
Is anyone else beginning to notice that the "diversity" concept has become so overused that it is no almost entirely meaningless? I've caught myself not a few times going through some scholarship essay or something and checking for appropriate places to drop the "D" word. I can already envision the future of Writing 101 classes:

Teacher: So I'd like to talk to you about your essay.
Student: Sure, what about?
T: Well, it's about your word choice.
S: Yes, and what about it?
T: You could make this paper a lot stronger if you included some more, umm, I don't know, Diversity!!!!!
S: Well, what do you mean? My topic was on the historical usage of imaginary numbers. How would diversity help my paper?
T: Oh, like for example, right here, look, you could add 'diverse' and that would make that paragraph so much better. Just look:
"Imaginary numbers were first introduced in a diverse Europe in the 16th century".
S: Umm, I don't see how that helps anything.
T: Oh no, it makes it much better, believe me. Diversity, diversification, diversify, diverse. These are good words! You should use them more. Be liberal with diversity!
S: I still don't get it.
T: Well, you don't need to get it! Just do it. Your grade will be significantly higher if you make your paper more diverse.
S: Alright.

God, I need to do something with my time🙂


 
would it be odd to say that being a resident of the city of the school you are applying to would contribute diversity to your class?

I feel like having a passion for the place that you live and study is really important and something that i could share with my classmates. However, I am afraid that perhaps admissions may think it is a factor that makes me LESS diverse...

any thoughts?
I don't see how it'd add any diversity. You'd probably add diversity if you came from ANOTHER city, not from the same.
 
I suppose its just a way for you to talk about what a badass you are. The prompt should go something like this:

Describe one time when you did something really badass. How will this experience contribute to the awesomeness of our school?

Then, when you show up for an interview, they punch you in the face and confirm that you are junk and not, in fact, a badass compared to the sweetness that is their school.
 
your electrical engineering degree def might give you a different perspective on things. perhaps being older? any experiences? any interesting classes you've taken... PM me if you would like to know what i wrote about
 
I don't see how it'd add any diversity. You'd probably add diversity if you came from ANOTHER city, not from the same.

sigh. yes, this is what i was afraid of. haha. it is difficult to be diverse when i feel that i am really no different than anyone else out there.
 
I have a very unique thumb print 😀
 
sigh. yes, this is what i was afraid of. haha. it is difficult to be diverse when i feel that i am really no different than anyone else out there.

I think thats the problem. It'd be a lot easier to write about being diverse if you felt it. I guess we're junk.
 
Write about how, as an EE, you decided to visit the grave of the genius Nikola Tesla. While paying your respects, an amazingly violent thunderstorm formed and lightning struck Tesla's headstone. After this, you realized you had a spiritual connection with Tesla, and sometimes he speaks vicariously through you from The Other Side.

If it's not adding diversity because you channel ol' Nikola's words, at least you will add diversity by sounding utterly insane.👍👎confused:
 
Ours go to 11... Most blokes can't say that!
 
All I can do is echo what the others have said...think of some experience that you've had that maybe others have not. For mine, I wrote about the week I spent managing a hurricane shelter for the Red Cross. It's definitely not something that everyone has done, and I learned a lot about management and crisis response. I think your MS is a good starting point...I'll let you in on a secret: people who aren't engineers don't tend to understand engineers. So tell us about that secret world you live in...we'll be fascinated. 😉
 
I suppose its just a way for you to talk about what a badass you are. The prompt should go something like this:

Describe one time when you did something really badass. How will this experience contribute to the awesomeness of our school?

Then, when you show up for an interview, they punch you in the face and confirm that you are junk and not, in fact, a badass compared to the sweetness that is their school.

Oh my gosh...I just laughed for like 5 minutes about this...That would be the most badass essay prompt ever....LOVE IT! :laugh:
 
it would be badass if the schools would just ask: what makes you different from other applicants?

but I am dreaming
 
Anyone ever seen that movie, where the guy dresses up as a black guy to go to a particular school I think? Hopefully someone who remembers the movie better can correct me. Anyhow, to the OP, thats not a bad idea...:idea:
 
I am making corrections and will post when ready. THANKS to everyone for their suggestions!
 
I think that's pretty good actually.

The only critique I have is that you broke it into "I bring a person..." instead of making it a single narrative. I think it works the way you've written it, but sounds either cliche or like you didn't want to take the time to string it all together.

Regardless, I'd interview you.
 
So how the hell do I add diversity? Well, I'm a white male... nope thats not gonna do it. I did electrical engineering and got a MS in EE and BME. Maybe? I hate these questions. How do you all BS your way through this?


Things to talk about:

- Age (You're probably older with your MA degree)

- MA degree (Discuss how you have already been in a graduate program and your degree)

- Hobbies ( Do you have a cool hobby that makes you unique? For example; I play music and have recorded and played live which I feel makes me bring something different to a school.)

- Any life changing experiences? ( Health related, sick relative, etc...)

Just some ideas to think about. Hopefully you can exploit at least 2 of them. Good luck.
 
I have pretty much the same advice hehe, other than that I think it's pretty strong.
 
Things to talk about:

- Age (You're probably older with your MA degree)

- MA degree (Discuss how you have already been in a graduate program and your degree)

- Hobbies ( Do you have a cool hobby that makes you unique? For example; I play music and have recorded and played live which I feel makes me bring something different to a school.)

- Any life changing experiences? ( Health related, sick relative, etc...)

Just some ideas to think about. Hopefully you can exploit at least 2 of them. Good luck.



From ur things to talk abt:
- AGE 21, f
- MA DEGREE: nope, just plain old bio major, doing research @ NIH
- HOBBIES: nothing unique- um...skiing....biking (both mentioned on my primary, im pretty serious abt them, but i went to a small private high school and a small private college there werent any teams or stuff to play on or whatever...how bout shopping? is that unique? im good at it too
- LIFE CHANGING EXPER:this was elucidated in my PS

dont come from underpriviledged anything (but dont get me started on affirmative action), just a regular family....
i dont have anything unique. Publications? but I dont think thats unique these days among premeds...
HELP~!!!!
 
why dont they have to sell themselves to us? we are going to pay them a bazillion dollars to just read our essays. it's all about them. what makes YOU special and an asset to OUR medical school? what do YOU like about OUR school? how are YOU a good fit for US? this relationship is so one sided. it's like paying someone to let you ask them on a date. and then they say no after you profess your love to them and give them $300.
 
Ditto from me too. The "I bring" is a little off-putting. But your ideas are great.
 
not trying to criticize, but when I see people that list their strengths in an uninteresting, laundry list type fashion all I see is "blah, blah, blah." It doesn't leave a mark.

After reading that, all I remember is engineering. I think that's something that adcoms could gathered from your AMCAS.

Take a unique approach. Yes, absolutely integrate the things you were talking about, but make it memorable. For my secondaries, I talked about things that couldn't be understood directly from my AMCAS and also went into a great deal of depth on 1 or 2 attributes/anecdotes. I made it very personal.
 
Anyone ever seen that movie, where the guy dresses up as a black guy to go to a particular school I think? Hopefully someone who remembers the movie better can correct me. Anyhow, to the OP, thats not a bad idea...:idea:

I bet you're thinking of Soul Man

I don't think that would work for BW, though. First, the guy did it to get a scholarship, not to get admitted. Second, it was for undergrad, not med school. And third, people found out what he was doing and he was only able to keep his hot girlfriend becuase she learned a Valuable Lesson, and he was only able to stay in school because James Earl Jones also believed he learned a Valuable Lesson. Other than that, yeah - good plan.
 
why dont they have to sell themselves to us? we are going to pay them a bazillion dollars to just read our essays. it's all about them. what makes YOU special and an asset to OUR medical school? what do YOU like about OUR school? how are YOU a good fit for US? this relationship is so one sided. it's like paying someone to let you ask them on a date. and then they say no after you profess your love to them and give them $300.

Supply and demand.

Once you get accepted to two schools, then they have to start selling themselves to you.

(More seriously, my understanding is that what you want happens on interview day. We have interviews with a few people and sell ourselves for an hour or three, but they're also showing us around the school, answering our questions, and selling themselves to us for the whole day.)
 
I've been tweaking this stupid essay for Michigan for days. Can I PLEASE get some feedback?

At the University of Michigan Medical School, we are committed to building a superb educational community with students of diverse talents, experiences, opinions, and backgrounds. What would you as an individual bring to our medical school community? Do not exceed 1500 characters (about 250 words).

I bring to the University of Michigan Medical School a student with a strong electrical and biomedical engineering background, a background based on problem solving both as an individual and as part of a team. I am excited to share my insights with my peers, while exchanging ideas with an educational community as diverse as Michigan’s.
I bring an individual who can crack a smile during times of stress, who loves to cook, play hockey, snowboard, and holler “Go Blue” on football Saturdays.
I bring a student who has learned the value of planning and thinking analytically, and who possesses the ability to be flexible when a problem changes or when someone else has a better approach. My current research combines electrical engineering, cellular biology, material science, and physiology into a field where a working knowledge of many subjects is vital to achieving success. This has taught me the value of integrating information from multiple disciplines to solve a problem.
I bring a teacher who understands his student’s frustrations, and enjoys sharing in their successes. I hope to someday share my knowledge and experience with the next generation of medical students.
I bring to the University of Michigan someone who hopes to contribute to, as well as draw from, the wide variety of knowledge that exists among Michigan’s medical students, so that we may all become exceptional physicians.


As stated before, PLEASE don't start every sentence with "I bring". It does add a sense of order and organization to the essay, but it hinders the essay - causing it to lack emotion and depth.

Instead of making a list, could you talk about experiences? Discuss the experiences which have impacted you significantly. You should write something that causes a reaction in the reader - not a checklist.

But there are good ideas within that list, change the format and make it more personal.
 
I bet you're thinking of Soul Man

I don't think that would work for BW, though. First, the guy did it to get a scholarship, not to get admitted. Second, it was for undergrad, not med school. And third, people found out what he was doing and he was only able to keep his hot girlfriend becuase she learned a Valuable Lesson, and he was only able to stay in school because James Earl Jones also believed he learned a Valuable Lesson. Other than that, yeah - good plan.

Hahaha
 
It's about who can BS the best not who is the most diverse (whatever the hell that means.)
 
So how the hell do I add diversity? Well, I'm a white male... nope thats not gonna do it. I did electrical engineering and got a MS in EE and BME. Maybe? I hate these questions. How do you all BS your way through this?

Lying about something that you haven't experienced may become a liability so be careful. maybe you've done something special as a volunteer or maybe done something interesting and useful as an engineer? you could also look into hobbies, stuff you've done in school or maybe studied abroad.
 
Any comments would be appreciated!

Select one experience from your list in part B (Non-Academic Activities) and describe in a brief essay how it impacted on your decision to go into medicine. Do not exceed 1500 characters (about 250 words).


During the year I spent taking premedical courses, I worked at Johns Hopkins Hospital with the Director of Interventional Neuroradiology on a number of projects. These projects included innovative stent designs, acoustic aneurysm detection, and the development of rapid prototyping techniques to enable a physician to practice difficult cases. Although I had decided that I wanted to work in the medical field, I had not fully decided on whether I wanted to work as an engineer developing medical devices, or provide direct patient care as a physician. While I found the technology this doctor utilized in providing treatment fascinating, I realized that, as an engineer, I would never have the personal experience of directly caring for others. Watching these physicians perform intricate procedures to heal their patients, I became aware of the compassion these doctors exhibited. Additionally, I was excited by how these doctors integrated manual dexterity, medical knowledge and technology into patient care. I realized that I did not wish to perform research isolated from clinical medicine, and that I would obtain considerably more satisfaction working directly with patients. This is not to say I have lost all interest in research. Instead, I wish to combine a medical education with my knowledge of engineering, so that I may act as a bridge between these disciplines and assist in creating innovative medical technologies.


At the University of Michigan Medical School, we are committed to building a superb educational community with students of diverse talents, experiences, opinions, and backgrounds. What would you as an individual bring to our medical school community? Do not exceed 1500 characters (about 250 words).

I bring to the University of Michigan Medical School a student with a strong electrical and biomedical engineering background, a background based on problem solving both as an individual and as part of a team. My time as an engineer has matured my ability to plan and think analytically. I have also cultivated great flexibility in dealing with changing problems or when a colleague has a better approach. I am excited to exchange insights with my peers, knowing that there is so much to learn from an educational community as diverse as Michigan’s. My current research combines electrical engineering, cellular biology, material science, and physiology into a field where a working knowledge of many subjects is vital to achieving success. Integrating information from multiple disciplines has become natural, and has allowed me to create a novel electrode design for interfacing with the peripheral nerves of amputees. Beyond the engineer, I am an individual who is known to crack a smile during times of stress, who loves to cook, play hockey, snowboard, and holler “Go Blue” on football Saturdays. I have a passion for teaching, and understand my student’s frustrations. I also very much enjoys sharing in their successes. In fact, I hope to someday share my knowledge and experience with the next generation of medical students. I bring a committed student, who hopes to contribute to, as well as draw from, the wide variety of knowledge that exists among Michigan’s medical students.
 
Hail to the victors valiant
Hail to the conquering heroes
Hail HAIL to Michigan
Leaders and Best!

Hail to the Victors Valiant
Hail to the conquering heroes
Hail HAIL to Michigan
Champions of the West




Sounds good to me.
 
Hail to the victors valiant
Hail to the conquering heroes
Hail HAIL to Michigan
Leaders and Best!

Hail to the Victors Valiant
Hail to the conquering heroes
Hail HAIL to Michigan
Champions of the West




Sounds good to me.
Amen! Hahaha
 
Any comments would be appreciated!

Select one experience from your list in part B (Non-Academic Activities) and describe in a brief essay how it impacted on your decision to go into medicine. Do not exceed 1500 characters (about 250 words).


During the year I spent taking premedical courses, I worked at Johns Hopkins Hospital with the Director of Interventional Neuroradiology on a number of projects. These projects included innovative stent designs, acoustic aneurysm detection, and the development of rapid prototyping techniques to enable a physician to practice difficult cases. Although I had decided that I wanted to work in the medical field, I had not fully decided on whether I wanted to work as an engineer developing medical devices, or provide direct patient care as a physician. While I found the technology this doctor utilized in providing treatment fascinating, I realized that, as an engineer, I would never have the personal experience of directly caring for others. Watching these physicians perform intricate procedures to heal their patients, I became aware of the compassion these doctors exhibited. Additionally, I was excited by how these doctors integrated manual dexterity, medical knowledge and technology into patient care. I realized that I did not wish to perform research isolated from clinical medicine, and that I would obtain considerably more satisfaction working directly with patients. This is not to say I have lost all interest in research. Instead, I wish to combine a medical education with my knowledge of engineering, so that I may act as a bridge between these disciplines and assist in creating innovative medical technologies.


At the University of Michigan Medical School, we are committed to building a superb educational community with students of diverse talents, experiences, opinions, and backgrounds. What would you as an individual bring to our medical school community? Do not exceed 1500 characters (about 250 words).

I bring to the University of Michigan Medical School a student with a strong electrical and biomedical engineering background, a background based on problem solving both as an individual and as part of a team. My time as an engineer has matured my ability to plan and think analytically. I have also cultivated great flexibility in dealing with changing problems or when a colleague has a better approach. I am excited to exchange insights with my peers, knowing that there is so much to learn from an educational community as diverse as Michigan’s. My current research combines electrical engineering, cellular biology, material science, and physiology into a field where a working knowledge of many subjects is vital to achieving success. Integrating information from multiple disciplines has become natural, and has allowed me to create a novel electrode design for interfacing with the peripheral nerves of amputees. Beyond the engineer, I am an individual who is known to crack a smile during times of stress, who loves to cook, play hockey, snowboard, and holler “Go Blue” on football Saturdays. I have a passion for teaching, and understand my student’s frustrations. I also very much enjoys sharing in their successes. In fact, I hope to someday share my knowledge and experience with the next generation of medical students. I bring a committed student, who hopes to contribute to, as well as draw from, the wide variety of knowledge that exists among Michigan’s medical students.
I didn't read your essays because I'm feeling particularly lazy right now. However, I felt that I should ease your nerves a little with the following:

I applied to UMich because it's my undergrad school, and it's in state for me. However, if you have a look at my MDapps, I have very little chance of getting an interview there, let alone an acceptance. So, I figured I'd be a little creative on their secondary, and used a poem to respond to one of the essays.

How does this help you, you're asking? Well, even if someone there happened to think my poem was creative or entertaining, I highly doubt it was enough so to warrant an interview. Therefore, I have just opened up a possible space for interview for you. No worries!

Best of luck. 🙂
 
Well I've got encouraging news for you, then.

An applicant applied to a Mohs surgery fellowship with my boss and her personal statement had a handwritten poem for the last 1/3 of the paper. It was unique and fun enough to grant her an interview a week before the match list had to be submitted. She became the top pick and earned the fellowship.
Iiiiinteresting. Hahaha unfortunately mine was not hand-written, and if the formatting was lost for readers the way it was when I checked post-submission, it probably lost its value, since it was done in rhyme and meter. 🙁 But I still appreciate the comment!
 
Any comments would be appreciated!

Select one experience from your list in part B (Non-Academic Activities) and describe in a brief essay how it impacted on your decision to go into medicine. Do not exceed 1500 characters (about 250 words).


During the year I spent taking premedical courses, I worked at Johns Hopkins Hospital with the Director of Interventional Neuroradiology on a number of projects. These projects included innovative stent designs, acoustic aneurysm detection, and the development of rapid prototyping techniques to enable a physician to practice difficult cases. Although I had decided that I wanted to work in the medical field, I had not fully decided on whether I wanted to work as an engineer developing medical devices, or provide direct patient care as a physician. While I found the technology this doctor utilized in providing treatment fascinating, I realized that, as an engineer, I would never have the personal experience of directly caring for others. Watching these physicians perform intricate procedures to heal their patients, I became aware of the compassion these doctors exhibited. Additionally, I was excited by how these doctors integrated manual dexterity, medical knowledge and technology into patient care. I realized that I did not wish to perform research isolated from clinical medicine, and that I would obtain considerably more satisfaction working directly with patients. This is not to say I have lost all interest in research. Instead, I wish to combine a medical education with my knowledge of engineering, so that I may act as a bridge between these disciplines and assist in creating innovative medical technologies.


At the University of Michigan Medical School, we are committed to building a superb educational community with students of diverse talents, experiences, opinions, and backgrounds. What would you as an individual bring to our medical school community? Do not exceed 1500 characters (about 250 words).

I bring to the University of Michigan Medical School a student with a strong electrical and biomedical engineering background, a background based on problem solving both as an individual and as part of a team. My time as an engineer has matured my ability to plan and think analytically. I have also cultivated great flexibility in dealing with changing problems or when a colleague has a better approach. I am excited to exchange insights with my peers, knowing that there is so much to learn from an educational community as diverse as Michigan’s. My current research combines electrical engineering, cellular biology, material science, and physiology into a field where a working knowledge of many subjects is vital to achieving success. Integrating information from multiple disciplines has become natural, and has allowed me to create a novel electrode design for interfacing with the peripheral nerves of amputees. Beyond the engineer, I am an individual who is known to crack a smile during times of stress, who loves to cook, play hockey, snowboard, and holler “Go Blue” on football Saturdays. I have a passion for teaching, and understand my student’s frustrations. I also very much enjoys sharing in their successes. In fact, I hope to someday share my knowledge and experience with the next generation of medical students. I bring a committed student, who hopes to contribute to, as well as draw from, the wide variety of knowledge that exists among Michigan’s medical students.

I think you are good to go! I think you've made the best out of what you have to bring to the table. They both read well and I think you come off as a well rounded person. Good luck!
 
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