Adversity essay

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Hey everyone,

Please don't quote as I'd like to have the option of deleting later but...

I've been debating some topics for the adversity essay and wanted to ask about one of them.

Is writing about dealing with racial profiling and other forms of racism ok? Don't wanna sound whiny, but pretty much I'd explain how it was humiliating to be stopped by the police in the middle of campus (was just walking around like every other student) and searched/treated like a criminal. Despite me being super cooperative and polite the entire time I still felt like I was being treated like crap. I'd talk about how I've been dealing with things like this for a while (although this was one of the most extreme examples) and handled it by just doing my best to interact with people and change their biases and opinions through my actions and behavior. I could then tie it to some of the outreach and programs I helped set up on campus to educate and inform people (although I've already mentioned some of these in my work and activities section). I could also mention some of the positive experiences I've had with the police to not make it seem like I'm turning this into an anti-police thing or anything like that because that's definitely not what I'd want to happen.
 
I think that's perfectly fine to talk about. It's going to be important to connect it to specific experiences and ways that it has shaped you. If you only focus on the profiling, it may come out the same as many other essays, and you want to be sure yours is unique!
 
I think that's perfectly fine to talk about. It's going to be important to connect it to specific experiences and ways that it has shaped you. If you only focus on the profiling, it may come out the same as many other essays, and you want to be sure yours is unique!

Ok thanks! Yeah I'd just make a brief recount of what happened and then focus the rest on how I handled it and overcame it! I'm still brainstorming some other ideas but I feel like this would be the easiest one for me to talk about.
 
So I've finished this essay but it's still pretty rough and slightly too long. Anyone willing to give it a read and help with trimming and smoothing it out. I may have spent too much characters recounting what happened so I'd definitely like help trimming that part so I can expand on the rest more.
 
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