Hi guys I did a practice essay under timed parameters to prepare for the PCAT on the 17th. I'd REALLY appreciate it if someone (or a few) could give me some pointers on things I could improve. I wrote this exact copy on paper in 30mins, starting from right when I was introduced to the question. THANK YOU!
Topic: Children today often lack healthy role models. Indicate an individual or type of individual whom you believe might serve as a positive role model, and indicate why you made your particular choice.
The Media is often the messenger when it comes to delivering good and bad news. Moreso than not the news revolves around scandals, celebrities, and other problems. The youth of America need to be exposed to better role models. I believe if the media focused on individuals whom came from nothing and are now successful, it would emphasize such traits such as perseverance and gratefulness to our future leaders.
Individuals that came from a lower socioeconomic status have experienced hardships many of us take for granted. There were days when they didn’t know where their next meal would come from. Our children thankfully don’t have to worry about things like that, however it can lead to a sense of entitlement. A person that has paved their own way knows the real struggles that life can throw your direction. They know to be grateful for all the good things too. This can be used to teach our children gratefulness and a feeling of less entitlement.
Not only can individuals who climbed their way up the socioeconomic ladder show us gratefulness but they can also teach perseverance. These less fortunate had rocks thrown in their way constantly, rocks that make our hardships look like pebbles, It is their perseverance that kept them on their path to become successful. A natural perseverance is a hard trait to find in today’s society. It can teach our children what it really means to want something. Consequently, perseverance is what makes the reward even greater. Knowing how hard you’ve tried to make something a reality is a lesson from which our children can benefit.
The media will always focus on the headlines that catch everyone’s eye. I believe that stories about individuals that possess perseverance and gratefulness can benefit our children much more than celebrity scandals. These are the role models we need on the news that will inspire our children.
Topic: Children today often lack healthy role models. Indicate an individual or type of individual whom you believe might serve as a positive role model, and indicate why you made your particular choice.
The Media is often the messenger when it comes to delivering good and bad news. Moreso than not the news revolves around scandals, celebrities, and other problems. The youth of America need to be exposed to better role models. I believe if the media focused on individuals whom came from nothing and are now successful, it would emphasize such traits such as perseverance and gratefulness to our future leaders.
Individuals that came from a lower socioeconomic status have experienced hardships many of us take for granted. There were days when they didn’t know where their next meal would come from. Our children thankfully don’t have to worry about things like that, however it can lead to a sense of entitlement. A person that has paved their own way knows the real struggles that life can throw your direction. They know to be grateful for all the good things too. This can be used to teach our children gratefulness and a feeling of less entitlement.
Not only can individuals who climbed their way up the socioeconomic ladder show us gratefulness but they can also teach perseverance. These less fortunate had rocks thrown in their way constantly, rocks that make our hardships look like pebbles, It is their perseverance that kept them on their path to become successful. A natural perseverance is a hard trait to find in today’s society. It can teach our children what it really means to want something. Consequently, perseverance is what makes the reward even greater. Knowing how hard you’ve tried to make something a reality is a lesson from which our children can benefit.
The media will always focus on the headlines that catch everyone’s eye. I believe that stories about individuals that possess perseverance and gratefulness can benefit our children much more than celebrity scandals. These are the role models we need on the news that will inspire our children.
I am not a grader, but I will look at the guidelines and give you a score of 0-6 with some feedback.
