can somone edit this EC description?

[CamdenStick]

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I assisted nurses escort, feed, and comfort patients; take vital signs of patients; connect patients to electrocardiograms; deliver patient specimens and lab results to different departments. Also, I witnessed physicians working together to treat patients in many critical situations.


also, is this sufficient or do i need to write more?

 

[CamdenStick]

?

 

[premeddick]

I assisted nurses escort, feed, and comfort patients; take vital signs of patients; connect patients to electrocardiograms; deliver patient specimens and lab results to different departments. Also, I witnessed physicians working together to treat patients in many critical situations.


also, is this sufficient or do i need to write more?

"Assisted" is past tense, "feed" is present tense. Fix your tenses.

 

[thinkorswim]

You might want to have someone look over your PS as well...

 

[jochi1543]

You might want to have someone look over your PS as well...

True. The writing is sub-par here, so your PS may need some reviewing.

Here's how I'd edit this w/o changing things too much, though honestly, I'd completely paraphrase the whole thing:

"I assisted nurses with (or "by," depending on what you're trying to say) feeding, comforting, and escorting patients. I took vital signs and set up electrocardiograms, and delivered specimens and lab results to various departments. I also often observed physicians working as a team in critical situations."

The above is grammatically correct, however, I still think it's awkward.

 

[armybound]

I would leave the last sentence about observing out, as I doubt it was one of your duties.

I'd make it one long sentence.

"I assisted nurses by feeding, comforting, and escorting patients, taking vital signs, setting up EKGs, and delivering specimens and lab results to various departments."

 

[jochi1543]

I would leave the last sentence about observing out, as I doubt it was one of your duties.

I'd make it one long sentence.

"I assisted nurses by feeding, comforting, and escorting patients, taking vital signs, setting up EKGs, and delivering specimens and lab results to various departments."

Good stuff.

 

[Oceaner]

wow... trouble with the verbs man 😵

 

[Surf Rx]

I would leave the last sentence about observing out, as I doubt it was one of your duties.

I'd make it one long sentence.

"I assisted nurses by feeding, comforting, and escorting patients, taking vital signs, setting up EKGs, and delivering specimens and lab results to various departments."

Not to be anal or anything, but I think you'd need to use semicolons, since one of the list items already contains commas.

"I assisted nurses by feeding, comforting, and escorting patients; taking vital signs; setting up EKGs; and delivering specimens and lab results to various departments."

 

[CamdenStick]

so one-sentence descrption should be good enough?

 

[armybound]

Not to be anal or anything, but I think you'd need to use semicolons, since one of the list items already contains commas.

"I assisted nurses by feeding, comforting, and escorting patients; taking vital signs; setting up EKGs; and delivering specimens and lab results to various departments."

yeah, that's probably better. I'm not good with the whole punctuation and what not.

Camden, I think what Surf has written there would be sufficient.

 

[Surf Rx]

I think it depends on the ADCOM member reading the descriptions. Some might want more descriptions of your involvement, and others, like LizzyM, would appreciate the brevity. However, since this is probably an activity that 90% of applicants have, I'm going to go out on a limb here and say that the description is sufficient.

 

[armybound]

I wonder if they even read the descriptions. I'd imagine they just skim over the titles to see if anything unique or interesting pops up.

 

[hope08]

So in describing ECs, are we only supposed to describe our duties? Or should we also include what we got out of the position/why it was meaningful? Thanks!

 

[armybound]

So in describing ECs, are we only supposed to describe our duties? Or should we also include what we got out of the position/why it was meaningful? Thanks!

Keep it short, just list the position/description. If you want to explain what you got out of it you can describe it in the PS or wait for the interview.

 

[CTtarheel]

so one-sentence descrption should be good enough?

YES!!! You just need to tell them what you did. In all honesty they probably don't even look at it for things like a hospital volunteer as they know what hospital volunteers do. It's more important for other activities with which they may not be as familiar.

If you got something significant out of an activity or it influenced your decision to pursue medicine that should be worked into your PS, NOT listed in the activity description. My longest description was 3 sentences I think.

 

[voirlesetoiles]

I assisted nurses escort, feed, and comfort patients; take vital signs of patients; connect patients to electrocardiograms; deliver patient specimens and lab results to different departments. Also, I witnessed physicians working together to treat patients in many critical situations.


also, is this sufficient or do i need to write more?

this description seems too vague.... that doesn't mean you have to make it lengthy, some of your word choices can be replaced with more specific ones ....

ex: different departments (what departments? where?)
"witnessed physicians" (you mean shadowed? observed?)
"critical situations" (what kind of situations? clinical cases/medical situations/emergency situations? something more specific than 'critical' sounds better)

"witnessed physicians working together" sounds awkward to me. But overall, good description with some brief editing.