Is this a good grabbing line for the PS?

[Sparda29]

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Well, if this is a good grabbing first line to use in the statement, then I think that I have a real good essay to go with. What do you think about this as a opening line.

"I love drugs."

I would go on to explain in the next sentence on how I'm fascinated by how drugs, these inanimate objects, affect a person's body.

 

[Chem Geek]

Admissions departments are going to read your PS. You don't need to "grab" them.

 

[ExpressMaiL]

"i Love Drugs."

I give this a 6/10.

 

[UBCmicrobi]

Admissions departments are going to read your PS. You don't need to "grab" them.

Agreed. Explain your interest in drugs, though

 

[goinkhead]

i like it. its different. i'd use it if it were my idea. be careful not to get sucked into simple three word sentences though.
goodluck!

Well, if this is a good grabbing first line to use in the statement, then I think that I have a real good essay to go with. What do you think about this as a opening line.

"I love drugs."

I would go on to explain in the next sentence on how I'm fascinated by how drugs, these inanimate objects, affect a person's body.

 

[mrblah]

Well, if this is a good grabbing first line to use in the statement, then I think that I have a real good essay to go with. What do you think about this as a opening line.

"I love drugs."

I would go on to explain in the next sentence on how I'm fascinated by how drugs, these inanimate objects, affect a person's body.

DO IT, After reading your opening line, I was so impressed that I don't think you even have to write any further. I'm sure adcom will give you a seat right on the spot.

 

[fenixtnlfan]

Admissions departments are going to read your PS. You don't need to "grab" them.

Au contraire! Adcoms read hundreds to thousands of PS each cycle. Something grabbing is hella nice and can get you remembered!

To the OP, I feel like people probably use that one a lot thinking it's clever. I don't know if I am right on that though. IMO you would get an eye-roll.

 

[Drug Doc]

I'm thinking the same as the poster above me. It being an application for pharmacy school, "I love drugs" actually seems ridiculously cheesy. How about "I hate drugs" ? Now that might actually catch some eyes.

Don't dwell on the catch phrase just yet buddy. First focus on developing a thorough ps that catches a readers attention throughout. The whole thing has to be an easy informative read. Oh yeah, and if the whole essay is completely dependent on a catch phrase, then you've done something wrong. Even if you have the coolest catch phrase in PharmCAS history, if they lose interest shortly thereafter then its a lost battle nevertheless. Once you have a solid essay then you can start playing around with the intro to make it catchy.

Oh yeah and don't limit yourself to inspirational, sentimental, or other ooby gooby catch phrases. Feel free to explore the "wtf" reaction. Thats what I went for and I guess it worked.

 

[Farcus]

sorry but that doesn't grab my attention in any good positive way. Its not cheesy its just ehh not very professional

 

[mrblah]

to the op:

Here is a thought, instead of catch phrases, why not write a good and memorable essay. I rather let my story grab your attention. With catch phrases, I always feel cheated when I see them in personal essays.

 

[aboveliquidice]

Well, if this is a good grabbing first line to use in the statement, then I think that I have a real good essay to go with. What do you think about this as a opening line.

"I love drugs."

I would go on to explain in the next sentence on how I'm fascinated by how drugs, these inanimate objects, affect a person's body.

It isn't bad - but know that posting your ideas on a public forum leaves them open to be taken. Use a bit more caution with your PS's content...

~above~

 

[nerv12345]

i think that's a terrible attention grabber
if you really feel you need to grab their attention (which you really don't need to in the first place), it should at least be witty

i think the adcoms would rather read an essay that was to-the-point when it came to why you want to do pharmacy, etc rather than read "extra" stuff that probably wouldn't sway their decisions much

 

[LuvCaramelFraps]

i think that's a terrible attention grabber
if you really feel you need to grab their attention (which you really don't need to in the first place), it should at least be witty

i think the adcoms would rather read an essay that was to-the-point when it came to why you want to do pharmacy, etc rather than read "extra" stuff that probably wouldn't sway their decisions much

I completely agree. That's the approach I took when writing my personal statement. I tried the whole witty, clever, sob story approach to my personal statement but it didn't work. It didn't work for me when I wrote my essays for undergrad applications and I realized it didn't work for me now for Pharmacy applications. I just made sure I sounded sincere and really wanted to pursue a career in pharmacy.

 

[Farcus]

while we're on the topic a lot of online Personal Statement I read online are all very short like a few sentence per paragraph instead of say a few big ones. Is this how we're suppose to go about doing this?

 

[ADN1226]

My PS was exactly under the max # of characters for PharmCAS... i think it came out to 1.5pages single spaced. The length doesn't matter too much, just make sure you have everything you want to say to the adcom. ie. experience, passion for pharm, future goals... etc.

 

[Sparda29]

Yeah, I figured this would be the response. I know what to write but I don't know how to start it off with a bang without sounding like a douchebag.