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I'm in the middle of this debate with my friend: do you think med school personal statements are supposed to read like a cover letter, or more like a story?
A few of my friends who read my personal statement commented that it was too flowery. I think this was especially because the story with which I framed my statement wasn't directly related to medicine or my qualities, but was instead discussing humanity, which lead into me talking about medicine and how that relates back to my story. Does that make sense? Sorry, that sounds confusing. It would kind of be like someone narrating a story about something that happened to them and ending with how this is an analogy for a career in medicine and what is required of one. Think of the story as the set-up of a joke, and the way it ties back to medicine as the punchline.
True, my story was used as a literary device and it's not necessary, but I also think that it makes the statement interesting and adds another dimension. However, my friends said I should cut that fluff and use that space to talk more about myself.
(Let it be known that they also have no ties to the medical field and are not applying themselves so they have no relevant knowledge base of comparison.)
I don't know that I trust their advice. They seem to be directing my statement more toward the style of a cover letter. There's nothing really wrong with that, but as an adcom, after about 3,000 of the standard "I became interested in medicine when..." essays, I'd be pretty stoked to come across a statement that was a little more captivating and "flowery". That's not to say that my personal statement wasn't professional or that I didn't make my case, but my statement reads more like a narrative chapter out of a book than a short dissertation. Am I off base? What is/was yours like, especially those of you with successful applications?
A few of my friends who read my personal statement commented that it was too flowery. I think this was especially because the story with which I framed my statement wasn't directly related to medicine or my qualities, but was instead discussing humanity, which lead into me talking about medicine and how that relates back to my story. Does that make sense? Sorry, that sounds confusing. It would kind of be like someone narrating a story about something that happened to them and ending with how this is an analogy for a career in medicine and what is required of one. Think of the story as the set-up of a joke, and the way it ties back to medicine as the punchline.
True, my story was used as a literary device and it's not necessary, but I also think that it makes the statement interesting and adds another dimension. However, my friends said I should cut that fluff and use that space to talk more about myself.
(Let it be known that they also have no ties to the medical field and are not applying themselves so they have no relevant knowledge base of comparison.)
I don't know that I trust their advice. They seem to be directing my statement more toward the style of a cover letter. There's nothing really wrong with that, but as an adcom, after about 3,000 of the standard "I became interested in medicine when..." essays, I'd be pretty stoked to come across a statement that was a little more captivating and "flowery". That's not to say that my personal statement wasn't professional or that I didn't make my case, but my statement reads more like a narrative chapter out of a book than a short dissertation. Am I off base? What is/was yours like, especially those of you with successful applications?