lexington251

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So I've drafted a response to the challenge prompt, but I'm not sure if it will be well received:

During my freshmen year of college I was pretty overwhelmed by academics, and also had to deal with my (ex)-girlfriend cheating on me over long-distance. I talk about overcoming that by building healthier habits, and pick up fitness as a hobby. I gained a lot of weight (was pretty underweight at the time), became a lot more fit, happy, and focused (which shows in my transcript).

Would this be a good response?? I don't want this to come off as arrogant or minor, because it had a significant impact on who I am today.
 

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I would probably not directly talk about a cheating ex-girlfriend imho. I would maybe change the focus to being overwhelmed by academics, which lead to social problems (in lieu of girlfriend), creating the need to build better habits to balance everything. I actually plan on writing about a kind of similar experience, so I'm also wondering if the approach I'm suggesting is a good one.
 

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So I've drafted a response to the challenge prompt, but I'm not sure if it will be well received:

During my freshmen year of college I was pretty overwhelmed by academics, and also had to deal with my (ex)-girlfriend cheating on me over long-distance. I talk about overcoming that by building healthier habits, and pick up fitness as a hobby. I gained a lot of weight (was pretty underweight at the time), became a lot more fit, happy, and focused (which shows in my transcript).

Would this be a good response?? I don't want this to come off as arrogant or minor, because it had a significant impact on who I am today.

I would probably not directly talk about a cheating ex-girlfriend imho. I would maybe change the focus to being overwhelmed by academics, which lead to social problems (in lieu of girlfriend), creating the need to build better habits to balance everything. I actually plan on writing about a kind of similar experience, so I'm also wondering if the approach I'm suggesting is a good one.

The challenge here isnt simply just new at college , but include stressful personal relationships and reaction to that with weight gain. So its the combination of all three and the overcoming of them that makes it significant. The issue is presenting the romantic aspects in an appropriate professional manner. I would mention that but more in the line of distance than fidelity. In my head I see this as

The combination of problems overwhelms you and affects you academically
You take hold of each individually and work on them
you do so in a way that doesnt simply alleviate the issues but creates life long habits that may serve you well in future academic endeavors

And with any writing, see how it works. That's what the delete key is for
 
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