Secondary Help...suggestions greatly appreciated!

[Neoneji123]

Hi Guys!

I've begun receiving some DO secondaries and I started work on them. Finished with CCOM's. A lot of the questions have an overlap (such as why here or diversity question). I was wondering if someone would kindly read my first secondary I wrote and give me a critique on it. It will help set the stage for how I move forward with my future secondary's. I will say my answers hasn't been a typical response that some might have to most schools. I talk a lot about the resources and inclusion their school offers as an LGBT candidate and why that would be a great fit for the osteopathic education I'd receive.

I'd really appreciate anyone's help as a first timer.

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[Neoneji123]

CCOM's prompts
1) Why do you believe CCOM would provide you with the type of osteopathic medical education you are seeking?
(basically interpreted this question as why CCOM)
2) Why should CCOM accept you into this year's class?
(interpreted this question as what qualities/diversity can you bring to the class)