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Hey guys,
I'd like some input and critique on this essay I spent about 20 minutes on. I know it needs a lot of polishing, but I want to know if the general idea of what I'm trying to convey will look good and makes any sense.
I have never seen an example AACOMAS essay, so I really had no idea what to write other than my influences for medicine.
<a href="http://www.geocities.com/jkdmed/essay3.doc">My Essay</a>
Note: You may have to copy/paste into your title bar. Geocities is lame sometimes.
Here's my first impressions:
A) I spent too much time on the "fight"
B) I need to elaborate more on the last two points
C) Possibly explain the relevance between osteopathy and martial arts (though I think they'd be smart enough to get it)
What else? For you flame-happy people out there, please keep in mind I wrote this in about 20 minutes with no rough draft.
I'd like some input and critique on this essay I spent about 20 minutes on. I know it needs a lot of polishing, but I want to know if the general idea of what I'm trying to convey will look good and makes any sense.
I have never seen an example AACOMAS essay, so I really had no idea what to write other than my influences for medicine.
<a href="http://www.geocities.com/jkdmed/essay3.doc">My Essay</a>
Note: You may have to copy/paste into your title bar. Geocities is lame sometimes.
Here's my first impressions:
A) I spent too much time on the "fight"
B) I need to elaborate more on the last two points
C) Possibly explain the relevance between osteopathy and martial arts (though I think they'd be smart enough to get it)
What else? For you flame-happy people out there, please keep in mind I wrote this in about 20 minutes with no rough draft.