Diversity Essay brainstorm help

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Hi All! I am working on my diversity essay and so far, I have a couple drafts that I can't decide between. I would love any ideas or improvements (or if they just suck...) I can make to them.

1. I talked about how growing up in poverty with my mother, and having my father living a country away brought a passion for cooking with whatever I can get my hands on. My parents came together once a year and we made sure to do something fancy with our meals during that time using our limited resources. This translates to how I problem solve, manage resources, and my passion for bringing people together with food. Now, I volunteer at a food bank where I hold cooking demos for low income families using food that they leave behind during their pickups. I have also done some dinners with friends/coworkers with dietary restrictions, which was a fun challenge.

2. I was pre-vet and worked as part of the animal care team. I developed patience and diligence when working with creatures that cannot communicate directly with me. I hope to bring these skills of the classroom and patient care by being observant and detailed, but also open to new suggestions and learning experiences.

3. I moved between 3 countries when I was younger, and, each time, I was exposed to different cultural backgrounds. I discussed (very quickly) some specific differences. Ultimately, these experiences taught me how to adapt, be understanding of different perspectives, and a desire to explore new things. I talked about bringing to the class a curiosity towards new advancements, how they interact with older procedures and concepts, and developing a well-rounded understanding of medicine patient care.

Personally, I am leaning towards 1 since I can relate my volunteerism to it...

Thank you!
 
Hi All! I am working on my diversity essay and so far, I have a couple drafts that I can't decide between. I would love any ideas or improvements (or if they just suck...) I can make to them.

1. I talked about how growing up in poverty with my mother, and having my father living a country away brought a passion for cooking with whatever I can get my hands on. My parents came together once a year and we made sure to do something fancy with our meals during that time using our limited resources. This translates to how I problem solve, manage resources, and my passion for bringing people together with food. Now, I volunteer at a food bank where I hold cooking demos for low income families using food that they leave behind during their pickups. I have also done some dinners with friends/coworkers with dietary restrictions, which was a fun challenge.

2. I was pre-vet and worked as part of the animal care team. I developed patience and diligence when working with creatures that cannot communicate directly with me. I hope to bring these skills of the classroom and patient care by being observant and detailed, but also open to new suggestions and learning experiences.

3. I moved between 3 countries when I was younger, and, each time, I was exposed to different cultural backgrounds. I discussed (very quickly) some specific differences. Ultimately, these experiences taught me how to adapt, be understanding of different perspectives, and a desire to explore new things. I talked about bringing to the class a curiosity towards new advancements, how they interact with older procedures and concepts, and developing a well-rounded understanding of medicine patient care.

Personally, I am leaning towards 1 since I can relate my volunteerism to it...

Thank you!

I like #1 and I think you should go with it since it seems like you have an emotional connection to it as well; that makes for a good/interesting essay.
 
As Kraskadva said, you could potentially combine some. The second one doesn't seem as strong imo cause I would think you'd want to be careful that you didn't compare animal care to patient care, lol. It is nonetheless an interesting part of your background but harder to work into this kind of essay I think.
 
As Kraskadva said, you could potentially combine some. The second one doesn't seem as strong imo cause I would think you'd want to be careful that you didn't compare animal care to patient care, lol. It is nonetheless an interesting part of your background but harder to work into this kind of essay I think.

I'm definitely going with that plan. Is it too awkward to directly say "I plan to bring to [SOM] blah blah..."?

I definitely understand the concern with the second one. I was able to use it on other essays! 😀
 
I'm definitely going with that plan. Is it too awkward to directly say "I plan to bring to [SOM] blah blah..."?

I definitely understand the concern with the second one. I was able to use it on other essays! 😀
I don't think it's weird at all. If you have a more humble way of saying it then even better. Some secondaries directly ask you "what will you contribute to the future class" so it shouldn't rub anyone off the wrong way.
 
I don't think it's weird at all. If you have a more humble way of saying it then even better. Some secondaries directly ask you "what will you contribute to the future class" so it shouldn't rub anyone off the wrong way.
Great! I was worried about outright saying/bragging, but I am trying to answer that prompt!
 
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